My Poem "FATE"

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My Poem "FATE"

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Hope you guys like it.
It is one of my favorites I have written.
Enjoy.


FATE

Fate is so cruel.
It must hate me,
as much as I hate it.
I hate it more.

Fate controls us,
If we let it.
It makes us do things
we wouldn't normally do.

Pressuring us into making rash decisions.
Then we feel some what foolish afterwards.
But sometimes it is for the best.
But we just go back and make the same. . .

Stupid. . .Pointless. . . .
Mistakes.
Over,and Over,
AND OVER AGAIN!

It's human nature,
to make mistakes.
But it's idiotic,
to continue that very same mistake.

Answers Answers,
all around.
But not a correct one
in sight.

That is what Fate does.
Throws answers in your face,
and expects you to know what is right.
Some people can, but most people are clueless.

Even when it's right there,
in front or their eyes.
Poor people.
I myself am clueless.

To the problem that I face.
Some people may guess it.
Others may know right then and there.
But I see my problem. . .

But I have fallen in love with my mistake.
So,
What am I to do?
That's for me,not Fate, to decide.
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I'm dangerous. I hurt people. but I don't mean to. I love her. But I don't. Does she love me?

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Damn nice.
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Yeah dude, well done.

It takes a certain amount of moxy to open your soul and post like that. Very brave. :bigthumb:

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Thnks guy.

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It feels really good to hear people compliment something u love doing.
I'm dangerous. I hurt people. but I don't mean to. I love her. But I don't. Does she love me?

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Let me give you a nugget I've learned from 40 years here:

If it's something you love, don't let people's opinions make any difference. Do what makes YOU happy so long as you don't hurt anyone else.

When I was in college I took an advanced English course where the entire term was spent writing short stories, then finally a (short) novella. I was going through a really tough time and you always are taught, "write what you know" so I did. It was a very moving and disturbing piece about a guy's thoughts as he plunged down off a bridge. His reflections on a life unlived, things like that.

I was really proud of the work and my prof wanted to publish it locally in a literary guild. I got ashamed though and a little embarrassed so I took a pass. Shortly thereafter the hard drive that the work was on crashed and it was lost. I tried several times to recreate it, but I'm sure you understand that sometimes you can only visit a place once, and then you can never go back completely. It was a good life lesson for me. Don't worry what people think so much. If you are proud, then that is all that matters. Had I not suffered insecurity, I'd always have that work instead of the memory of it.

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wow. . . .

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that is very sad.
I'm srry u lost yur work.
Thnk you for the life lesson.
That was very thoughtful of you to share that with me.
I'm dangerous. I hurt people. but I don't mean to. I love her. But I don't. Does she love me?

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Post by gopostal »

I don't mean to come across "preachy". I hope it wasn't taken that way.

The bottom line is that you do great work from what I've seen. Be proud of it and ignore anyone who tries to tear it down. It's most likely jealousy :naughty:

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Very valid point there Kelly. :cool:
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Thnks guys.

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I'm glad you like it. I'll try and get another one up here some time after school and drama practice today.
My mom and sister got scared of me because of my first poem.(Black)
They made me feel embarrassed to show my work.
But now I could care less wat they think about me or wat I create.
I'm dangerous. I hurt people. but I don't mean to. I love her. But I don't. Does she love me?

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